Wednesday, November 19, 2008

I’m hardly yours Anil.

It was 10 p.m and

your flannel-checked shirt like

a technicolor chessboard revealed

thick curled strands of hair,

and glimmering below was

gram-coloured

sweat-shaded

chest.

It was 10. 02. when

I had vowed to pluck every

plastic button out with my bare teeth,

until I reached the golden buckle

of your belt.

It was 10.08 and my gums weak,

I had cheated, and used two fingers

to yank out the last of the buttons.

10.10 and I had opened the fly

of your stitched pants, with the smell

of recent tailoring,

By 10.12, my hands floundering,

I could see the stray strands

of your moustache quivering

with heavy breath.

At 10.14 and some negligible

seconds later, before the mobile

vibrated,

before you zipped up,

your wife had a craving for chaat,

and your kids, cake fudge,

and a drive to the new airport.

I’m hardly yours Anil.



(Finally wrote.)


2 comments:

Arka said...

I like! Manages to be many things - tender, funny, mordant, savage. The 'twist' is not exactly a sucker punch, but quite effective. Your 'voice' is getting stronger (based on whatever I have read).

One caveat though: Why do so many women feel compelled to operate from within a persecution complex? Don't get me wrong - I am not talking about a persecution complex in the 'real' world, the writer's 'real' life, but the fact that a lot of writing by urban women that I read follows this pattern. It doesn't make your writing any lesser, but perhaps something that's worth discussing.

arvindiyer said...

I agree with Arka a great deal here. It feels ( with the amount of reading that I have done over the years and especially the Indian writers and women in particular that I have read in recent times) the style is gravely similar.

But all said and done.. this is by far one of your best ever piece. Loved it completely.