I’m hardly yours Anil.
It was
your flannel-checked shirt like
a technicolor chessboard revealed
thick curled strands of hair,
and glimmering below was
gram-coloured
sweat-shaded
chest.
It was 10. 02. when
I had vowed to pluck every
plastic button out with my bare teeth,
until I reached the golden buckle
of your belt.
It was 10.08 and my gums weak,
I had cheated, and used two fingers
to yank out the last of the buttons.
10.10 and I had opened the fly
of your stitched pants, with the smell
of recent tailoring,
By 10.12, my hands floundering,
I could see the stray strands
of your moustache quivering
with heavy breath.
At 10.14 and some negligible
seconds later, before the mobile
vibrated,
before you zipped up,
your wife had a craving for chaat,
and your kids, cake fudge,
and a drive to the new airport.
I’m hardly yours Anil.
(Finally wrote.)

2 comments:
I like! Manages to be many things - tender, funny, mordant, savage. The 'twist' is not exactly a sucker punch, but quite effective. Your 'voice' is getting stronger (based on whatever I have read).
One caveat though: Why do so many women feel compelled to operate from within a persecution complex? Don't get me wrong - I am not talking about a persecution complex in the 'real' world, the writer's 'real' life, but the fact that a lot of writing by urban women that I read follows this pattern. It doesn't make your writing any lesser, but perhaps something that's worth discussing.
I agree with Arka a great deal here. It feels ( with the amount of reading that I have done over the years and especially the Indian writers and women in particular that I have read in recent times) the style is gravely similar.
But all said and done.. this is by far one of your best ever piece. Loved it completely.
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